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Old 11-28-07, 11:09 AM   #9
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Originally Posted by SPuLâ„¢
bored so might as well

hook pretty cool. Vocals should be upped tho. But dude did pretty nice job. Your flow was a bit choppy, vocals maybe could be upped bit too. 2nd verse flow started out kinda ehh, but emotion pretty cool. lyrics seem cool. The "If that's love" part in 2nd verse near end was good idea. But you should of punched in the "if that's love", because you seemed to be rushing in words. The third verse, or bridge or w/e. Unclear what you was saying, and didn't sound too good.

overall it was decent track tho.

thanx for the feed back.
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i did punch in on "if thats love" in the second verse. like i recorded those three if thats love parts seperately if thats what that means.
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if i get a chance to record on a better mic i'll def take these suggestion. thanx
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