I felt this on an emotional sense but on a lyrical sense it wasn't really my type. It didn't have a steady flow or something, to me it was just lacking in an area I just can't seem to point out so I'll just have to go with it wasn't my style or something. I can see you have talent though and I agree with a guy above me. Improve vocab you used a lot of the same words for rhymes in this piece... Keep elevatin

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