they've already hit it on the head..first your vocal tone and what you were talking about went with the beat, i was feeling the song i didnt notice your accent really at all which is good.
you did transfer from your verse into the hook very nicely, i would just say work on extending your vocabulary,and pernounce some of your words a little better in the first verse...overall i would bump this and thats really rare coming from me..

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