Pretty decent piece but your forcing your vocabulary to favor your own word choice and it takes alot away from your drop entirely, always with trying to truly highten your vocabulary like that it severly shifts the syllable count which effects the flow and fluidness/smoothness of the drop itself from line to lines, truly a ok piece just a lil over done on the vocab the imagry was ok the emotion was pretty basic IMO *shrugs* keep it up tho

*You need to feed another piece or i'll be forced to closed this*

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