Personally I think this is shit, its short but not sweet. Rhymes are simple bro, theres a small amount of emotion, but its so short that the emotion doesnt have time to grasp, reach and hit.
Im allmost on the edge of closing this again and moving it to 'freestyle cypher'
but........
seen as you left some solid feed on my peice, Im gonna let it slide this one time.
On the real, your way above this and I hope to see a solid, thought out peice from you next time.