Vocab,vocab,vocab.

This is solid bro, I think its far above most of RV hence the reason its being slept on. Im more impressed byt the fact, its got solid vocab in it, but still makes sense and everything flows (fits) perfect.

religion fills there souls, but vengence dominates there hearts
glancin slowly at red ring on her neck, hatred escalates greater


This stood out like crazy to me. Your a talented writer, looking forward to more.