There verses have been broke down enough..I broke em down the other day but I x'd out of my page, so I'm not gonna break em down again. lol, I had Ram havin 4 meh punches an kirk havin 2..although Ram had some funny lines, he lacked the consistency that Kirk came with. Ram ya carried a decent swagger all the way through..toss in some wp, an make sure each punch connects, liek your payin respects line was decent concepts..but it didn't make sense hsi verse resembled a suicide note. Kirk your opener was eh..you had a few more that weren't hard hittin..like open the door line was meh as well. Both need to pick it up for next week imo. Decent showin by both, but neither of yours best.

v/kirk

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