nice stuff

lay - you really have a different way of writing, to me anyways, although (i think), your verse lacks the imagery kirk uses, i dont think it takes away. you just use such truth and emotion in every line it keeps me reading, like after every bar i stop and relate it to life, its very descriptive and provocative in a way you can question beliefs and ideals everywhere... so overall, what may seem like an awkward structure, its definately a worthwhile read, good stuff

Souls bid a bitter retreat trying to escape those rhythm of screams
Thus, the decision it brings -- the imminent paradise your hidden between.

kirk - very vivid, dripping even, with emotion, imagery, flow is sick... you spend alot of effort, it seems, in creating a specific atmosphere where the reader can go for the length of the piece, and get lost in it, its really captivating, and for a while now you've been able to do this, so, i've told you before, so fuck ya and keep writing

I carry this notebook grasped as I stride through beach sand,
Feeling the gentle summer breeze as It glides through each hand,
Am I dead or alive? Am I able to escape when my fates cuffed?
Or must I spend an eternity dreaming, just waiting to wake up?

word.

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The Establishment
I am the Batman.