I liked this piece man, I'm usualy not a big fan of like the whole scene you kinda portrayed but you wrote about it ALOT bette than some kids hop on here an try an write. You kept a pretty good rhyme scheme throughout..you had some pretty nice meta's in there, the content of the piece was solid, I felt the emotion while I read it. Good story..kept me drawn in as a reader. Keep writin man.. rtf

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