yea you do got issues homie..lol...im not gonna bust ya out like that though...man...ya pieces structure was wierd...somma ya flow scheme was hard to keep a hold of..because it would change everywhich way...nah mean...n somma ya words made it harder to read...cuz they were connected to other words...

the beginnin stanza was coo..the whole idea bout the bus thinggy was a nice approach to convey what you was startin out wit in ya piece...

it was aiight...keep elevatin...n plan ya ish homie

holla

one...hunnet

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