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Like the last piece I read here, your wording was alright but there could have been a much better rhymescheme. Just felt that your syllable rhyming was a bit elementary man. Emotionally, this was an alright read. Some alright imagery here and there -- nothing to visual though. It flowed decently and with some elevation. You can be better with time man. Keep writing and elevating.
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