this was cool.. lil sweet piece of ones thoughts...

but now to the nitty of elevation sista

Life will move on - i will one day forget,
but i will also feel a kind of regret *~

im not callin u out..but "a kind of regret" doesnt sound all that nice... a sense of...but not such thing as kind of...get ma drift?

ya poem was coo...simple in most aspects...ya vocab n structure in the beginning was a lil plain...you came a lil nicer towards the end of the middle stanza an the end...

holla

one...hunnet

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RN Vs RB WAR!!....yr 2000...vet~~YEA I SAID VET!! WHAT YOU WANT ME TO PROVE IT? STEP THEN YOU FUCKING HOMO'S