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Old 01-17-09, 02:58 PM   #5
Jay Rose
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hmmmm...what if they still hate you?
i think you could add to the song if you dubbed EACH used to hate me...made it seperate from the track...somehing better...
i like the vocal inflections.....
i also think you should have some extra shit in your hook, panned left and right.... make it bigger, its catchy but make it so it sticks in your head no matter what....
flow is all the same i feel i want more switch ups from verse to verse....
the biach needs to be emphasised more...make it like biachhhhhhhhhhhhh
good stuff tho, make the hook bigger.....work on the little things...cuz thats all that needs work...
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well i thought about the army
dad said, son you're fucking high
and i thought, yeah there's a first for everything
so i took my old man's advice
three sad semesters
it was only fifteen grand spent in bed
i thought about the army
i dropped out and joined a band instead


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