your well informed about my illness, without knowing the issue
and I'll let you know from the jump... that's going to kill you!
wording was off...alright..played..very weak...but has some potential in it if you work on the wording and overall punch...

this kids sex life is ghastly, he’s opted for jumpin old peoples bones
his penis is so pro’grammes it broadcasts in retirement homes
ahha. i like this one...good flip..dope bar.. lol can't say much..
good intro...

& I consider ya mom my equal, coz we both got guerilla tactical thinking
I plan raids n’ ambushes, her hairy ass climbed the Empire State Building
eh..i like it...but something threw me off.. good bar...i liked the first better but this concept is a little old...good flip on it though...


I dont listen to whipper snappers, go blow a fog horn bastard
it's like your k9 disappeared in your rhymes, all this 'dog gone' wackness
i liked this one alot..lol good shit..dope bar IMO..could of been worded to hit harder but hit pretty good nonetheless...
good..if your first bar would of been as good this would of been alot closer...

Bob, good shit, need to make both punches hit hard not just the last one...
thats the only reason i'm voted Original because both his concepts and punchs hit fairly well when your first one wasn't as eye catchin as your second bar..

good shit though...
good read..

v/ Original

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