Alright..

I'd change your intro speech, that's a pretty common one with topics like this. You've got to try and be a little more original right off the hop or else you're going to lose the listeners attention. You don't have to make a drastic change, just try and do something different. I mean if you dig it, that's cool, but I'd suggest fixing the first line at least: "You only got one life to live, how you gonna take this time to live?" It just doesn't sound right.

^ I know that sounds picky, but trust me, the first 12 seconds of a song are used to grab a listeners attention, not feed their ears something they've already heard before.

It's a very laid back and enjoyable beat, I dig it. The way you spit the first verse works good and has a nice flow. It's not the type of track where you would want to come in hype and I think the laid back style you started spitting with works just fine.

The chorus is alright, it's sort of basic and the idea has been done before many times, but it works with the song.

The big problem I have with the track is the dubbing. It's off and noticeable, you have to clean that up for sure.

Other than that, it's good quality, you can make out everything that you're saying and it sounds like it's shaping up to be a pretty decent track.