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Yea, for being posted yesterday it's getting slept on... but to be honest. I wasn't really feeling this, it's kinda like you forced almost all your rhymes and fucked up your flow. It didn't have much of that to me. The rhymes themselves were good but there was no flow to me. If you try to force that many rhymes into a line extend the line to more syllables or have it run smoother. Not have such harsh changes in pronunciation and it'll be all good. This in a lyrical sense was good but holds no water...
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