this was most definetly raw with imagery n strong vocab (even though at times i felt you did over elaborate with the more complex vocab, but then again, that may just be the way the piecce was....but the inconsistency in some parts may say different...but it's all good..)...

..anyway, brilliant the way you built it up....and ended it on a very chilling and twisted end...first i thought it was something to do with the Jews in the aftermath of Nazi Germany concentration camps, you know, so ill now in an allied hospital, paralyzed with fear, fear being the parasite or something like that...

...but the reference of Allah threw me off that perception of this piece...but i got a couple other more personal and weird perceptions out of it...

..it seemed to have a certain amount of persdonal depth to it for sure...what was it about from your 'eyes'? Whati mean is, what were you writing about exactly, from your point of view....?....