This was nicely done....

...an over-view more than anything...it seemed a bit dettached from the writers actual feelings at times...but still, flowed smoothly and well, vocab was used well...and was a, well, smooth commentary on society in general...in many parts of the world....

...as i said, maybe you could've attached your emotions to it better...but then again, to me it seemed like an over-view piece, full stop. which would mean emotions of the writer would not need to attach you emotions on too much.

Was a very good piece, respect....