^^^well 'And' at the beginning can be used to great effect. If the following words n lines of the piece are up to scratch and attach themselves well to the beginning. i.e. if the essence of the piece remains smooth n strong...

But this piece didn't pull it off...as it is very hard to....


I felt this piece was a bit too blunt at times...and as said above, vocab was kind of lacking at times (which attaches itself to the blunt critique)....

..but had it's moments where you could really feel and see what the writer was trying to depict....

....respect....