This also has the same problems as the other verse of yours I replied to so check that for more info about what's wrong but here's some new ideas you should do.

In your next drop don't use all caps and don't space out your lines like that. Keep it altogether how I'm writing, it won't look so long and more people will want to peep it. If it is long a lot of people won't check it out unless you are known in which in this case you are new. So, don't space out your lines and don't use caps... keep elevating

pz