First off...I think youre supposed to post in the tryout thread. But I'll leave feed anyway.

I like the beat. Kinda lame..but ehh.

verses - turn your adlibs down. a lot lower. lyrically it's actually not bad...one of the more lyrical commerical songs. kinda luda-esque with things actually making sense instead of a bunch of stupid lines thrown together. i think with the right rapper (not you) it'd be cool.
again the adlibs are too loud. you kinda remind me of the cool kids with the rhyme scheme. some pretty decent stuff in there. you need to get more comfortable on the mic. actually it might work if you just learn to mix your vocals.

this is definitely an insult but you sound like that cat that raps the song "give me a kick drum and a hi hat..." and somethin else. you sound like him. not a BAD song, but kinda boring.