Coker, your structure was hard to flollow, but your mesage was clear, some weak spots could use some rewording, better vocab and more use of poetic devices will make it a lot better, wasn't bad though



Write, I was really feeling this your a talentaed writer, message was clear your peice was dope except for it got a little boring as it went on, like you focused more on structure and vocabulary it took away from the story, still dope though....


vote write

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