Coke Dealer- A kind of nonspecific take on the topic for me, you got inside the narrator's head well and wrote his stream of thoughts, but as far as the piece went there wasn't much progression from where it started. Vocab could've been a little stronger but was solid for most of it. Rhyme scheme and imagery were straightforward, felt like you could've made more of them.

Mr Write- I liked the take on the topic although it was a little obscure in places, the picture brought things together at the end though. The imagery was the strongest aspect of the piece which to me is the basis of a good topical piece. Rhyme scheme could've been stronger. The vocab was at the right level to make it readable. The narration progressed steadily and held my interest. Overall a solid piece.


Vote- write, for a better quality verse all round.