coke i can definately see some potential from you. You do a good job relating to the topic that your writing about. overall i feel like you presented your peice well. the imagery stood out. painted a good picture in my mind. what i see wrong though is the simplicity of your verse. The structure was simple along with the wording. Definately upgrade your vocab.


mr-overall not bad man. i can definately tell your one to look out for in the league. i thought you had great wordplay and excellent scheme. You presented a great picture with your imagery as well. I can tell the piece was thought out, but definately not ya best

v/ mr

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