wow @ no feedback.


ok, ummm.. for starters I wasn't a big fan of the beat you used, that shit just sounds really boring. but to be fair, you did carry it well in the verses. the hook was gay as hell, seriously man. that shit was just so slow. I mean, how can I put it better. It seemed to drag.. like there was no "hook" to it for lack of a better term. it had no snap, no creative spark that made me think "ok, this is tight". the verses on the other hand were nice. you are pretty sick with the multies and shit, had some nice lyrics and shit that made me laugh. I especially enjoyed the little potshot at poetic, that shit made me laugh. second verse at the start.. to me it sounded like flow wise you sorta slipped off for a moment. like first verse was nice, second verse at the start you didn't sound as if you were with the beat for a second.. then after the jennifer lopez shit you got back on track and it was smooth from then on. I might be wrong, its just to me.. that is how it sounded.

overall, for some starter shit it was nice. for someone who only just got to audio it was good and pretty much that is all I can say. its a better first song than most of the dudes on this site when they first got it popping. a few minor slip ups, but overall nice. for real though, get with some better beats.. none of that slow ass boring shit. god damn fool.

next up, make a song about cooking. "I SAID I'M A DOPE CHEF, BABY!"

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