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Old 03-12-09, 04:14 PM   #11
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I'm wild like rabies, even in the 80s I was sendin kids to hades...
So MurDaH gonna die before he make it big like aborted babies!!
I dont know the basic metaphors don't hit anymore


I see this be MurDer, i predicted it in the 'War-I-Wrote'
so after this, only way we see "SNOCAP SIGN" is throu a 'HOROSCOPE'...
this was ok, basic and worded bad though
stop thinking ya bars are golden cuz ya not payed, droping trash every-where like u got maids
even M.T.V know urs not 'Made' cuz after this post u'll be un-able to fight back like you got Aids.......
Even with the ryming through out it, its still stretched, it's a huge bar could pretty much go as two, and again the basic metaphors don't hit and have all been done somewhere at sometime, thats your biggest proplem, get more creative give the metophores a rest..


Dood is wack and shit, This fools gay, all his bars lackin wit...
stop actin bitch, The only "Kool aid" he need is a fashion tip!!
this was ok concept anyway......


Ima give it to snow cap, murdur you still have to fix your structure, the first bar was better though, and get more creative with your punches, nothing you throw really hits at all.........
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