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Old 03-12-09, 05:52 PM   #10
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Johnny - Your verse was very nice, It went well with the picture and was a very smooth read. I followed along the whole way with the story, and the transition read smoothly and flowed nicely. The imagery was there, and the shrink patient concept to it increased it's dopeness. A very nice topical.

Fuck Yuu - You have a much different style than Johnny, and your structure makes your flow a bit harder to stay with. I'm not a big fan of the style personally, but it was decent enough here as the piece as a whole flowed decently. I thought the depictions of objects and society was very dope, but i felt like the piece as a whole lacked substance. The concept was dope, and I just feel like you could have done a lot more with it.

Vote - Johnny 6-Feet
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