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Jonathan - Your verse had a good story to it, but i disliked the ending to be honest. Just a subjective point of view, but I was hoping you were going to take the topic in a different direction. As far as the piece its self, its well written and no doubt a strong topical verse. The flow is nice, everything is very smooth. However, I've seen better from you, and I had high hopes on this because the concept was dope.
Bob - Cool topic, and I was feeling the flow all the way through. Your vocabulary was very strong, and I was really diggin the whole feel to this verse. The topic is so relevant to the current state of our society and I feel like I can really connect with what your saying. Although it was held back a little because of how short it was, it was pretty tight.
Vote - Bob...
by a little bit.
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