Cool takes on the topics, Johny was just written a lot nicer, Alpha your rhyme scheme is aight but some shit I had a hard time making rhyme when I sounded it out while Johny's rhyme scheme wasnt impressive but effective and he had a lot of metaphors and his style and creativeness with this peice was nice, i gotta give him the vote, Alpha your piece was too predictable and straight forward, you had some nice writing techniques but you need to up your arsenal

v/john

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