Yo man, I dunno whether this was meant to rhyme or what but ok, firstly, that lay-out is fucked up, it's very hard to read and understand, instead of what u got, try layin it out like this:

yo check it i feel like the world is crumblin down/
cause rap has stop bein bout what's real and just the now/
niggas speak of ice and smokin weed/
but what they don't tell is that it's like a disease/

This is alot easier to read so try pressin enter next time but man even when u fix up the lay-out, shit still doesn't rhyme whatsoever and there is no flow, I dunno whether I'm missin somethin or u meant to do this, you did rhyme in a few lines but for 95% of it, it just has no flow or rhyme scheme whatsoever, so next time try and adopt a flow and consistent rhyme scheme.

Peace Out!!!!

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