Utopia...hmmm...

...well simply done...you approached the topic of living in a 'ghetto' like life, and how it's so bad, that your Utopia would be something that is quite normal and constant for people living more well off...


i thought the ending was a bit off....i mean if it was meant to keep the reader going, like there's so much more , that you can't list it all, then i felt you could've ended it with something better, more striking...and if it wasn't then i felt it would've been better 'fade' it with 2-4 lines of oversight or something....

but as i said, simply done, but fairly effective...