This sucks.

There is no originality in it, there is no creativity in it and you should be ashamed you actually had to sit down and use your brain to write somthing like this. You have spelling mistakes, no structure, simple rhyme scheme and nothing AT ALL creative. its short and just all around sucks. Your bars dont even equal out, if youc an call them bars. Up your game, I usually close peices like this but if your gonna post again, UP YOUR TEXT GAME.

best line

my dream is to be a rapper but i only can fantasize
cause niggas dont feel my words like they paralyze


Best rhyme
smith and wesson .. shits a lesson.

worst line
life is harder than a dick arrected
i got alot on my chest like im big breasted

worst rhyme
hang man ... change man