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didn't even grasp that toxic/talksic play till i heard u say it.
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theres a lot more subtle ways to go about sayin what you're saying so people would listen to it with out feelin being preached at, i have that problem sometimes too. the hook is too straight forward, but the lyrics in verses are pretty dope cuz i think i agree wit most of it. but if u don't agree with all those things there should be some common ground you should touch on with people. jay-z says core emotions, but u should talk how the thinkgs u talk about effect people negatively and how.
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and just from a rap point of veiw you want to say what you are saying in as few words as possible to make it flow better. you should try to cut out as many little words as possible while keepin the main point in the bar to make it flow better so u dont sound like u are tryin to fit too many words in, or u need to speed your flow up or sumin.
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