yo son this is not me in poem first of all
second of all poetry isnt all about grammer and vocab
u need to understand that there should be feeling behind it thats the most important thing ive read your stuff and although i have not replied yet, your shit has very good vocab and grammer and all that, but u dont seem to have no feelin behind yours no offense but thats juss my opinion.
you have replied to 2 of my poems and said they were elementry
fuck that my poetry has feelin behind it. comes from real life experiences with the exception of this one.

my poetry doesnt need fixin its your perseption that does