Hum... I'll tell you this...


intro to long...

style is old and pretty played...

delivery... not bad...

You sound like your talking... no enthusiasm... sound like you'd be standin in the same place on stage all night...

Get some punches... the lyrics are like hip hop in 93...

voice good... you atleast are riddin the beat well...

The hook is terrible...

and this wasn't a freestyle... if so... start writing... if not... start tellin the truth...


not hatin... tellin you what I think...


Keep spittin... let the lyrics grow up...





Avalon...



ps... Atleast show you're a bad man... what you mentioned let me know you were like any other man out there... *shakes head* but maybe that was just me...