Thread: What's my deal?
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Old 03-27-03, 02:02 AM   #3
Dirty Shanks
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ok, not bad dawg... flow was ok, lackin' in wordplay, multies. That's not tha issue, but would have spiced it up more. You fell off at tha end, ya rhyme shceme was odd and not on-point. Ya structure was straight untill tha end. Seems like you wrote it, and then came back later to finish it cause ya left out tha answer to ya question. Keep spittin dawg. All-in-all not a bad verse.

peace..
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