no, you are not the illest....... know why?

your rhyme scheme has no flow or structure to it at all... which is why you are not the illest.... all flows aside if you dont have that to begin with you aint ill, unless you happen to be DMX..... you need 16 bar verses wit lines that is about the same length, they dont gotta be perfect cuz thats wack if your verses are driven more by formula than by flow.... but unfortunatley yours lack both.... room for improvement....... peace