This was tha tighest verse I have seen you post, straight up...I like these linez if I had to choose:

this storm of words is lightning and verbs/
raining metaphors to bring towers to curbs/
slowly destroyin' the earth/
backwards, like death to birth, last to first/
I know it hurts to hear my curse/

LOL, had me dyin'...as for a hook, give this one a try:

You'll stand Dazed in a stupor...It's Hooligan, Super...
Blazin' on troopers...who dare to mark tha path...
Tha sharpest shooter...with tha smartest computer...(brain)
Bow amazed at tha ruler...'cause they can't compete tha staff...(mic)

Hey how about check out my joint (Elements)...give me some feedback...