This had good content and a good plot/message to it but a lot of people were right about the "ion" thing. It gets old quick, 4 lines no more especially when you have many inner rhyming. I liked the piece over all but it had no REAL complexity in words but I give you props on actually coming up with THAT many damn words with "ion" lol... I didn't even know there was that many lol, but for real, that "ion" rhyming will kill a verse. It just... gets old...

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