fuckin ell that was long. nah man it was nice. ya topic was good but the fact that ya verses worked sorta comprimises wat ur sayin if u kno wat i mean. ya vocab coulda been better but the rest was nice. i agree tho sumtimes ya structure was a bit off sumtimes the rhymes diddnt end wen i thought they were and it threw me off a bit. anyway nice attempt. 7.5/10 Aight peace