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Old 04-02-03, 03:11 PM   #18
Soul Theory
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quik won . . .


yo quik work on ur rhyme scheeme and keep the lines that rhyme an even number . . .

::: Yo i see you edited your shit but thats aight, your fuckin rhyme was shite//1
I couldn't drop me verse last night, i was too busy makin your bitxhes pussy less tight//2
now if you look through yer mouth you can see a bright light//3
i see a few lines in your rhyme where a fuckin big bite, don't do it again aight//4
or i'll verbally uppercut you with a left then a right, i'll knock you out so you see the night//5


::: your name is johndoe and thats what is gonna be on the tag on your toe//6
i think its time you let go coz you really thought i would no show//7
Well i've never done that i always flow, just so my ego can fuckin grow//8




^^^ the last line in both of these throw off the rhythm and the flow of the verse cause im expect one more line to rhyme with it but instead u went off to a different rhyme . . .


nah mean . . .

vote on my battle with Flex Havana after he drops . . . http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=36788 . . . pz.
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