ok here we go, Dr Tristan will help you.

B.Rabbit - You need help. my suggestion is to look at how other people battle verses on here and then follow their example.

your layout-
bla bla bla
bla bla bla bla
bla bla bla
bla bla
bla bla bla bla bla
bla bla bla

Other peoples layouts

bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla
bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla
bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla
bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla

When you spit like you do, its like actually 4 bars or probably less.

Know what im saying?

Look at how bazzys lines were a lot longer than yours because he had stuff in there that was content. " you make me sick" and cliche like that will not make people look twice or even want to read the rest of it.


Vote: Bazzy

i voted on your battle, you should vote on mine

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=36600