You're starting off good at a young age-- I give you props for that I would say you have a good mind for it--but you still need to expand your vocabulary--You can rhyme i see that in this written--I think you need to think deeper with them though alot of your stuff is typical rhyme scheme--keep doing what your doing though you'll know when your there------

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