Your vocab was good but hopefully this isn't a finished product. Your hook was longer than your 2nd verse... Killah Kobra... best thing you've seen dropped in Open Mic?... You must not be in here much. I'm the mod of this forum and I couldn't even say 1 particular piece that is above all the rest. This definately isn't one of the best but it's not one of the worst... it's an average to above average piece... instead of focusing on the hook yet learn to write longer verses...

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