Alright this is not trying to change the peice-------------When you rhyme you tend to use the same participles at the end of each punch line---I think if you freshin up some of the structure and vocabulary choice you'll have a real nice piece--No hate man keep it up-- i think i might just be too damn picky possibly ignorant nah jokin about that--lol alright

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