hmmm....pretty deep...weak on rhyme scheme which u didnt really use much....uhhh good concep and vocab...very descriptive...but it couldve been better if u didnt put in paragraph form....and there are some lines that are too long that u cant even catch a breath while u readin it....but bottom line...it's good but u couldve made it better....dont take this the wrong way..im just criticizing a piece...i liked the meanin tho...keep on it

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