I liked the topic in this.
It showed emotion and heart,
It wasnt juss a bullshit rhyme to fallow a structure
and thats the kind of rhymes I personally like
I think that u didnt even need vocab in this. the flow was good the structure was pretty good and the topic was real good.
but i juss really like the feeling that you get from this like u poured your heart into it. Thats hot .
keep dispersin.