...well. im not really into pieces like this personally. so theres no way i was ever going to like it. but as for you. i see a lot of talent inside of you. your rhyme scheme and certain points you made are worth reading. when i write i approach the subject from unique angles and look at different things. if you could do the same you would be great. but its your style not mine. you have what it takes to succeed my friend.

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