iight. I loved the topic. It was sick. Thats the kind of topics i like.
iight now heres the bad parts. juss my opinion so dont take it wrong.
first never counterdict yourself in a verse. Thats not good.
second devolope a consistant rhyme scheme and stick to it
this will help your flow. cuz you have the words you juss gotta put them in a consistant pattern, that will help your flow alot.
Im not gonna say use better vocab because u could feel this piece. I felt the meaning behind it and thats whats important.
nice piece overall. if u wanna try that shit i told u go ahead if not thats cool. juss my opinions.
keep dispersin