Nice kidd, glad to hear that...
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my pulse bursts wit the surge of a free flowin river
but my heart thirst for the courage to eaze growin shivers
overwhelmin emotions start swellin til oceans explode
into a stream down my face cuz its seems that my fate is unknown
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The piece opened with a
feel to it, very nicely done opener, the flow was tweeked with the nicely placed internals as well, a good way to open this piece.
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that soothe the emotions and truth becomes open and clear to me
now its clear that these doubts and fearz i see r past reflections
of ol' dads deceptions but that perception is not what i am
I am not that ol' man i will stop and ill stand for what i beleive
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I know exactly what you feel dawg, it's a great feeling, but there is the elusive feel of "what now?" It's nicely summed up here on how you feel and what your goals are to work with that, again nice flow and use of internals.
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show love to my seed so he grows up to know hes worth more then gold
so i store these cold, thoughtz that r caught inside as sores i hold
to remind me of whats been done, so i always will love my son
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A good ending as well, the feel behind it is a good one and I liked that for the better part of this piece, the flow was more so the backbone to this piece along with the emotions you were going through, a very good piece about that...
congrats man,
love..